Friday, 27 June 2014

The Star


When she was a kid, her grandmother had taught her the first ballet steps the day her parents were killed in an accident.

Before her grandmother passed away, the old lady promised her that she would be her guardian angel and watch over her & guide her like a bright star.

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She filled the void in her life by joining the local ballet and getting fully immersed in dance, rising to be an international dancer, performing worldwide.

On new-moon nights, she often dances on her terrace, beneath the stars, hoping her parents and grandmother will see her...

She dazzles like a star on Earth as the stars in Heaven watch her starry-eyed...


My Story for Five Sentence Fiction- Dazzles

36 comments:

  1. The last line...beautiful. :)

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  2. I second red hand...the last line makes the whole story beautiful :)

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  3. I am starry eyed too! Wonderful take on the prompt Anita! :)

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    1. May we all have stars in our eyes, Soumya :) Thanks!

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  4. So many sweet and loving takes on this week's prompt. Haunting as well

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    1. Yes, I read some...beautiful entries! Great to be in great company :)

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  5. Beautiful story of a star on the Earth.. Let her stay blessed :)

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    1. Thanks Priya :) Amen! May God bless us all!

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  6. That was truly beautiful....esp. the last line....very touching!

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    1. Thanks a lot, Shilpa :) Delighted that you liked it!

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  7. last line was so touching .. beautiful story :)

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    1. Thanks Ankur! Glad you liked it :)

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  8. Very touching.

    www.volatilespirits.com

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  9. She dances on terrace hoping her parents would see her... this is touching! Beautifully described !

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    1. Thanks Umang :) Delighted you liked it :)

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  10. I agree with Red, the last line adds charm to the story. Simply beautiful, Anita!

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    1. Thanks Aathira :) Glad you liked it :)

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  11. I too found the last to be the cherry here. Wonderful imagination, Anita :)

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    1. Thanks Soumyaa :)
      Compared to the tales everyone else has spun, mine is a simple & straightforward take :)

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    1. Thanks Cifar :) Your's is great too :)

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  13. very touching, sometimes we always feel the presence of the departed beloveds around us.

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    1. True Ankita. They are our guardian angels :)

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  14. Such a wonderful & touching tale. Its true, I guess, that you have a guardian angel up there somewhere.. may be sometimes - I feel :)
    Tina from The Sunny Side of Life

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  15. Agree with Red.. the last line was indeed beautiful:)

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    1. Thanks Seeta :) Glad you liked it.

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