Thursday, 29 January 2015

Abandon The Solitude

He was happy with his beautiful wife,
and enjoyed a carefree & blissful life.

Like a butterfly on a flower, I was present on every date,
fluttering and witnessing everything lovely and intimate.
Photo Prompt- Magpie Tales- Mag 255

To accept the stark reality I wasn't ready,
when he abandoned his wife & went after another lady.

PHOTO PROMPT - Copyright Ted Strutz
Photo Prompt - Copyright Ted Strutz Friday Fictioneers
Unplugging his life-source, I killed him & became a murderer,
as I felt this world can do without another philanderer.

When solitude knocks at my door,
the writer in me can't take the weight of my character's murder any more,
nor his wife's lonely cries and anguish in store...


Does writing make you feel guilty sometimes? Do share in the comments below.

100 Words Story-Poem-
Linking with-
Five Sentence Fiction- Abandon
IndiSpire Edition#49- Solitude
Magpie Tales 
Friday Fictioneers
Alphabe Thursday- K For- Killed
Poetry Jam - Solitude
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92 comments:

  1. Kamaal kar diya, Anita !!! Love your creation!

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    1. Thanks Uppalji :) Love your words :)

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  2. Very well conceived thought.
    Good one.

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    1. Thanks for your nice words, Indrani :)

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  3. very nicely written! I got the feelin of U being R.K.Laxman's common man...! Coz U r d butterfly watching every scene, just like the common man is there as witness in every of Laxman's cartoons! :)

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    1. Oh Wow! Thanks for such a profound thought! I love R.K. Laxman & his Common Man.
      Thank you so much for this :)

      I meant to convey that the Writer is present on every page & with every little thing that happens with her characters...

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  4. Who is the actual butterfly: the narrator or the husband?

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    1. Good question :)
      The narrator i.e. the Writer is present everywhere, on every page just like a butterfly tries to make it to every flower!
      Wish husbands are loyal, and certainly not butterflies :D

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  5. Never feel guilty. It's all about the story!

    =)

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    1. Thanks for the tip, Susan!
      It's important not be be emotionally carried away!

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  6. this reminds me of a friend who told me recently "we Indians are very good at feeling guilty"

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    1. I guess we feel guilty easily if we are emotional, think a lot & take the blame on ourselves. There are many who blame others when things go wrong :)
      I feel- Anyone around the world, who's very sensitive & an emotional-fool, may feel guilty! :)

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  7. Aww... This is very wonderfully written and expressed!

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    1. Thanks for your nice words, Satya :)

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  8. Anita, I'm little confused whether it's a story or poetry. Superbly written. It is something only you can do it beautifully. It also reminds me of your previous story something about couple visiting painting of their own. Same writing style. Kudos :)

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    1. Thanks for your extremely kind words, Ravish :)
      Nice that you remember a previous Story-Poem so well too! It was "Tattoo Love Story"- about reincarnation! :)

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  9. wow....soul sis...super use of prompts and ek teer se kitne sheekar :) Superb...theme...story line and words muahhh

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    1. Thanks for your generous appreciation, Soul-sis :)
      Delighted that you liked it!

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  10. Sometimes, writing what depresses you makes you feel guilty. Don't stop in the middle of the pain. Keep going. Flush that shit out!

    You're a 'prompt' queen, Anita! :)

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    1. I agree with you, Aayesha!
      I have cried a lot while reading the news & while writing especially about bomb-attacks, accidents, injustice etc.
      Not getting involved is the solution. But. I cannot stop doing so, as I consider it my responsibility to express & share.

      Thank you so much for this amazing title! I promptly feel important! :)

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  11. We do live with our characters, don't we? A fellow writer says that one of the joys of writing is that we can create a character and do what we want with him/her. That is true! Great job, Anita.

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    1. Yes, passionate writers do, Linda! How true! I agree with your words & your fellow writer's too.
      Writing puts us in charge of the lives of our characters! Better be responsible :)

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  12. Beautiful poem. Happy to see someone multi-prompt (I used to write for 10 prompts in a single post). And to your question, I never feel guilty :)

    Someone is Special

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    1. Thanks a lot for your appreciation & for sharing, Sarav :)
      That's lovely to learn! 10 prompts is something!
      I love to combine prompts as I find it challenging :)

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  13. Love the end. Very well etched tale of poem meeting fiction:)

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    1. Thanks a lot, Vishal :) Glad you liked it!

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  14. when i write, i feel myself. so no guilt at all.. amazing use of prompts.. :) :)

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    1. That's lovely, Meera!
      It's a lesson- write & feel ourselves & NOT feel guilty :)
      Thanks!

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  15. I feel like I can abandon guilt and pain to a certain degree by putting it on paper...

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    1. Welcome to my Blog! Thanks for commenting :)
      Yes, sharing our thoughts can be cathartic & writers can abandon a lot...

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  16. a writer with a conscience. well done.

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    1. Thanks for stopping by & reading :)

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  17. Vow! You are truly creative. Your imagination is wonderful and this small poem is very thought provoking Anita.

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    1. Thanks for your kind words :) Delighted that you liked it.

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  18. I loved your take of a writer feeling guilty ... very different :-)

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  19. How thought provoking Anita! Writing does not make me feel guilty, but I do feel like I am a taker sometimes. I watch and take observations, and take from passers by what I will. So a think in some ways a writer is a taker of what is around them.

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    1. Thanks for sharing your views, Carrie.
      Even I feel so. Yes, writers are great observers & do benefit from the world :)

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  20. The character had to be horrible to deserve being killed. Very chilling writing.

    Have I ever felt guilty writing? I probably have when I was younger and felt to believe writing was something from which you can't make a living.

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    1. Thanks for stopping by & reading.
      Thanks for sharing & for your appreciation :)

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  21. Lovely poetry, I really liked your beautiful poem:)

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    1. Welcome to my blog! Really glad :)

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  22. I have such a hard time letting some of my characters get the punishment they deserve.

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    1. Truly Maria :)
      I feel happy that I can ensure justice :)

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  23. So creative and well written Anita ! :)

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  24. I think that even philanderer deserves not to be electrocuted.

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    1. The society is kind to men, Bjorn!
      Had the woman been the cheating-partner, would she have received your support?
      I hope & wish no one cheats their spouse ever...

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  25. Yes, sometimes I feel guilty writing…

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    1. Thank you so much for sharing your views :)
      In those times we must write better things :)

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  26. Dear Anita,

    Many times I've felt the remorse of killing off characters, but they were justifiable homicides.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks for sharing your views, Rochelle :)
      Nice to be in charge to ensure justice :)

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  27. Very thought provoking! I never feel bad killing off my characters but many of them are not good guys. <3

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    1. Thanks for sharing, Bekkie. At least in our writings we can ensure justice for good people & punishment for the not-so-good :)

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  28. Great story, Anita. The emotions in the piece are powerful. Thanks for joining, In Other Words, this week. Hope to see you again.

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    1. Thanks a lot for your appreciation, Patricia.
      It's my pleasure to join. Thanks for the opportunity :)

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  29. I do enjoy giving characters dark sides or killing one off now and then, we can't do that in real life! My husband shakes his head at me doing that, and some of my readers are uncomfortable, but for me it is an act of creativity, role-play. Your story was very moving!

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    1. Very true, Josie. Thanks for sharing. Yes, as writers we exercise great powers!
      "With greats powers come great responsibilities" :)
      Delighted that you liked my story :)

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  30. wonderful creation... awesome piece of writing... A "writer's write up" indeed...

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    1. Thanks for your wonderful words, Ashish! Means a lot from a fellow-writer :)

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  31. even i like it :)
    you are a versatile writer!

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    1. Thanks for your appreciation & recognition, Deb :) Means a lot :)

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  32. Wonderful story, Anita :) He deserves that!

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    1. Glad you liked it, Sindhu!
      In this world, only a few get what they deserve :)

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  33. ouch...isn't killing a bit too much...but it's needed sometimes...great lines Anita :)

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    1. Some writers suffer when they kill characters :)
      Thanks Sumanaji :)

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  34. Very different and the unique feeling of murder is certainly a raging passion. This works really well.

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    1. Thanks for stopping by. Glad you liked it, Alan!

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  35. yikes...ha...what a story you created...
    and hopefully we dont have to kill anyone
    to be alone...smiles

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    1. Appreciate your appreciation, Brian :)
      Thanks! Keep smiling :)

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  36. Ah, when solitude knocks at one's door...hmmm, the enigma is whether to answer or not. Quite a tale here.

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    1. Yes, that's the dilemma, Mary :) Thanks for reading!

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  37. This is quite a story, Anita. I am sure he did not expect such an ending.

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    1. He was the character. She was the author.
      She never knew what she'd suffer after murdering him :)

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  38. Anita,

    A wonderful response to the prompt...I never thought of using a character to express the emotion of solitude and being lonely. You have given a great example of both situations, after the crimes of passion!!

    Eileen

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    1. Thanks for the appreciation, Eileen :)
      Words can affect us emotionally & mentally.

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  39. nicely thought and executed , you have mastered the multiple prompt combining in your writing

    Loneliness

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    1. Glad you liked my attempt, Cifar! Thanks for your nice words!

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  40. Jealousy and revenge fuel many a novel… you are not alone. :)

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    1. Thanks for stopping by & sharing, Margaret :)

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  41. A touching story expressed through verse :) Well written, Anita!

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    1. Delighted to hear from you, Priya :)

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  42. I liked the story well written

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    1. I'm glad to know that! Thanks :)

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  43. A grim story of crime and punishment, Anita. Well done!

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