Monday 15 September 2014

After-Effects


He & she got married and dreamt of a life starry & jazzy. 

They allowed life to happen to them when they were busy.

They ran after schedules & attended to all the demands crazy. 

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Source: Five Sentence Fiction- Grief

After some years, they had grey-hair & everything was hazy. 

Failing eyesight & grief of lost time made them dizzy…


(55 Words)



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45 comments:

  1. Yes, we are largely a product of our actions!

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    1. Welcome to my Blog.
      Yes, indeed. That's the truth. We are about the choices we make...

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  2. All the hurry
    Wishes we bury
    Let's tarry
    To breathe freely.
    Live life
    Sipping on the nectar.

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    1. Thanks for sharing such an apt rhyme.
      Very true. I agree.

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  3. So true Anita! Happy writing... TC! Keep smiling :)

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  4. Alas i could do it in such few words but the sad story is i can't but dearie pls pls read mine...a long one though but perhaps echoing some similar strains. i am asking for all to slow down. You know Hindi week is going on and i take time out to read some classic Hindi Poetry...and urs took me to Shri Dr Harivansh Rai Bachchan jee. You know what ur poetry is just that excepting for the language...essence being the same...applause applause dear friend. Now language doesn't matter the essence does and the essence here is great too.
    Posting a link...Hear the son recite the poem Mr Big B himself...btw we had it in school text so we learnt it. Did you have it too...
    http://youtu.be/n_cBqBgFAns

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    1. Thank you so much for such a generous comment, Shivani!
      Wow!
      Delighted that this poem reminded you of Shri Dr Harivansh Rai Bachchan jee.
      Humbled.

      No, we didn't have it in our school text. They should make some works common & compulsory for all students to learn...

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  5. Nice poem, Anita! :-) loss of time can never be replaced and needs to be grieved over.

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  6. Many people live to work, while we should work to live.
    Have a great week.
    Wil, ABCW Team

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    1. May we work wisely & take care :)
      Thanks. Have a great week, Wil.

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  7. Looks like they did enjoy those years though :) Good combo of prompts!

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    1. They were busy like the rest of us. Hope they enjoyed. But, if they did, they wouldn't grieve...
      Thanks Shailaja :)

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  8. "...allowing life to happen" ... makes me sad... well done on the prompts!

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    1. Welcome here, Zoe :)
      Yes, don't most of us allow life to happen?

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  9. You have a very good understanding of what being "too busy" can do, how it can steal our life away. This verse was done so well, and the tale is bittersweet. As I am old now, I realize how many things I missed enjoying because life has kept me so busy. But there is still time... Papa Bear and I are spending a week at the ocean next week! :-)

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    1. Thanks Josie for your nice words.
      It is so true for most of us. We spend time & then realize what we have lost...
      Yes, there is still time & hope. As long as we are alive, let us make the most :)
      Great to learn about your exciting oncoming trip! Have a wonderful time :)

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  10. He he he :D .. I like the after a few years part, hair grey and memories Dizzy :D :)

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  11. Your poem clearly showed how important is to live your life, not just let it happen or else as you get older you will be saying "If only" and "I wish" a lot.

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    1. Thanks for sharing your wise words.
      Yes, I agree. May we all get to "live" life.

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  12. Life is short. This sad poem is a reminder of that. Time is precious, but it is so easy to let day to day life get in the way.

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    1. Very true, Val. Thanks for stopping by, reading & sharing your thoughts :)

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  13. Nice one Anita. Life indeed is too short. Lately I have been actually thinking on these lines!
    So much we lose in the rat race....

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    1. Yes, Vidhya! Great minds think alike :)
      May we wisely take part in life's race...

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  14. Yes indeed, Ashwini.
    Thank you so much for your wise words & appreciation :)

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  15. We need to live our time to the fullest. This was a good lesson learnt.

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  16. This is what most of us go through in today's world. We have no time for each others and when we realize what we are doing, it's too late.

    Loved this !!

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  17. time and tide wait for none, who so is prepared is the smartest one

    My Entry Courage

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  18. Ah, so true Anita.....we often complain that time is running fast but the truth is we are keep busying ourselves in many things and with the consequences we missed our beautiful time... Loved the post dear...:)

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    1. Yes Priyashi. You are right.
      Thanks for reading & for sharing such nice words :)

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  19. So true... and so cruel isnt'it ... "life just happened around them while ............."
    you are deep dear .... deep understanding of life ... sigh!

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    1. That's reality, dear Kokila...
      Hope we all understand & take care for the rest of our lives...

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  20. We do sometimes let the busyness of life steal the importance of life.

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Your words mean a lot to me.

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