There was a severe thunder-storm.
The day seemed like night.
There was no electricity.
She could barely see anything.
The tree in the backyard
crashed on her cottage.
There was dust everywhere.
Strong winds were on her face.
She fainted...
---------------------------------------------------
"Now, slowly open your
eyes..."
She found herself in a hospital.
"Are you feeling
okay?"
The young doctor’s voice
sounded familiar.
She was measuring her
pulse.
The pretty doctor's face looked
familiar too.
She could not remember...
"Who brought me here?"
"I did."
"Do you know me?" she asked.
"Don't worry. All
will be well, mother," the doctor said.
100 Words story for Friday Fictioneers
What do you think? Will she regain her memory?
Hopefully just a temporary concussion
ReplyDeleteThe fact she recognises him vaguely gives hope her memory will return.
ReplyDeleteA great use of the prompt, that I enjoyed reading.
ReplyDeleteFamiliar voice - Familiar face & then that last line...too good!
ReplyDeleteDear Anita,
ReplyDeleteI like the slow reveal to the end. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Oh my... that is such a difficult thing for everyone concerned. Well done, Anita.
ReplyDeleteAt least the doctor looks familiar to her. That's a good sign. Hopefully, she will regain her memory soon. Powerful story and the last line was the clincher, Anita.
ReplyDeleteI love this. You kept the tension right up to the end, making it SUCH a relief to know who saved her :)
ReplyDeleteThis could almost be a metaphor for dementia.
ReplyDeleteShe's alive and being cared-for. I call that good news. Time will tell beyond that...
ReplyDeleteOh so nicely done. Well written.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading our story, Great structure and ending. :-)
ReplyDeleteAwww, sweet hopeful ending.
ReplyDeleteI think temporary loss of memory.
ReplyDeleteGreat story :)
ReplyDeleteI am sure she will! Lovely little story :)
ReplyDeleteVery interesting. I want to see how it turns out. Well done.
ReplyDeleteFrightening!
ReplyDeleteIf things couldn't get any worse for her. Hopefully her memory will come back.
ReplyDeleteGripping!
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